Friday, 19 May 2017
Another Dimension
One day Nadia was struck my a lighting and she immediately transported into another dimension. Nadia had no clue where she was until she saw crocodile everywhere. She was so surprise to see different colour of crocodile such as pink,orange, blue and purple. Nadia had always been afraid of crocodile so she quickly scream and all the crocodile collapse and died. After the crocodile died she then saw a group of people within 10 meters coming out. Nadia was then reworded as the queen of this wide dimension as a bravery of killing the crocodile. She then lives happily as the queen.
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Hi Sophie,
I like how you Included the weekly challenge but next time try to not add to be verbs because you added a lot of was in your writing.The to be verbs was an additional challenge.I also think you should put 1 or 2 rhetorical questions just to make the reader Interested and to develop your story.
nice start!!
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