Wednesday, 31 May 2017

Evitcejda

Far from the stormy night with an abundant rain crashing trough the tiny wooden village. A person called Leepung, a shy man within a heavy voice, had no parent and live all alone in the darkness which dragging him into of an endless of sadness. One moment while the deadly stormy still endure, Leepung spotted something then suddenly he thought to himself and mumbled "The thunder! Over there! In the flash of lightning! I saw my mom!". Leepung hastily dashed to the thunder spotted then he mistook the step then Leepung heavily fell down to the hard gravel and died.

1 comment:

Anonymous said...

The story is very good. You could work on the grammar and mumbling is supposed to suggest incoherent chatting so you wouldn't have exclamation marks when you are mumbling but either way good story.