One day there was a boy walking down the road to find. When he have walked for a while he have met Burger king shop. He was really happy, he quickly ran to the shop and ordered a set of burger and french fries. Then just notice that he did not bring a money with him, he felt despair and walked out from the shop. But suddenly there was a girl ran out from the shop and gave him a burger, he was very happy. He said thank you the girl and the girl ran back to the shop. When the boy got back home he made a statue of a hand holding a burger and put it on his collection shelf
2 comments:
In your first sentence what was the boy trying to find? and what do you mean by "he have met burger king shop". Also instead of writing
" a money" it will sound better if you write " any money " . However overall i like your writing.
I really like your writing keep it going and next time pleas check your grammar.
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