I was eating some kind of shrimp in 5 stars hotel, and after that I need to go the hospital. The doctor said the shrimp that I ate had poison inside the shrimp. I shouldn't eat it, I already know by the taste of, but my mother still want me to eat it just because it expensive. I just couldn't eat something so expensive for a while, not only that, I won't eat anything that's not from my mother because I couldn't trust the food from the stranger anymore. I just don't trust anyone apart from my mother.
3 comments:
Good work on remembering some of your tenses there Mark; "I ate has poison" and "I will not eat". Interesting idea, try and find the other verbs that need to change into the past tense for your paragraph to make sense.
I really like your story mark you have included good adjectives.
I agree with Mr.Tom, because your tense could really be improved but I still liked what you tried to do with the story
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