Dear Andrew,
It must be a very stressful life but also rewarding. You must get really worried when you aren't sure if the mum and baby will make it. I presume that your favorite part of the job is when you save young and old.
I suppose it must be amazing seeing a newborn baby that would of most likely died without you. I think that what you do should be known world wide. Your work saves peoples lives and also makes people happy. I really hope you get the money to fix the hospital and save more lives,
Martha
4 comments:
I really enjoyed your letter, it was nice to see that you tried to imagine yourself in Andrew's position and describe the feelings you think he will have. The letter had good structure and grammar, and I liked the fact that you mentioned you hope he receives the money for the future as it shows you really studied the topic.
My only tip would be to maybe proof read to make sure that all of your punctuation is correct.
I really loved your piece of writing but maybe you should add more adjectives or descriptive words
I like your story but maybe you could add more about yourself maybe your age to make it more like a letter or you could add more adjectives. overall your letter is great.
I really enjoyed your work Martha. Your structure is very logical and I really like the tone and level of description behind it. To give the reader stronger imagery, maybe you could be more descriptive or ask some thought-provoking questions.
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