My name is Sade and I am 11 years old. In this letter, I am going to ask you a few questions about your job.
Do you like your job?
I wouldn't. I just wouldn't like touching someone else's blood.
Do you ever get scared?
I bet you do, I could never imagine doing anything like that! I just imagine when it could be a life or death situation.
How many babies and women have died while your trying to help them?
I bet there are a few each week because you don't have the right equipment.
Sade
6 comments:
I really liked your letter. Including a variety of questions and then giving your opinion on each topic was a nice touch. I also like the fact that you tried to imagine yourself in Andrew's situation and how you would feel in these situations. The letter has good grammar and punctuation, and a clear structure.
To improve, maybe start looking at more complex sentence structures and punctuation to further your writing!
I really liked how you have asked questions about what he feel abouts job
I like it a lot, you do were gloves when delivering babies though. I really liked the way you put how you felt in your letter as well.
I enjoyed reading your post it is very organized and had a lot of descriptive writing. XD
I like how you put everything in paragraphs. It makes it easier for the reader to read. Great job!
I really enjoyed reading this Sade. I loved the structure and clarity behind your piece, from the paragraphing, to the question and answer layout. I thought this was really well thought out and really powerful and innocent.
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