My name is Robert I'm from Thailand I would like to asked you about your job how do feel when you delivered the baby out from the mother do you feel happy to help others or do you feel sad why do you choose this job is it helped others makes you happy and happy to see the baby that has been born can I go visit you and watch how you work I want to know how it feel to see the baby has been born your work is very interesting please do your best until the end.
From: Robert
2 comments:
you forgot to add full stop and question mark.
Thanks for your piece, Robert! I really like the focus on Andrew's emotions and how he feels about his work/
To improve, I would suggest to proof-read through to see about tenses of words and punctuation, putting in full-stops and question marks helps the reader to know when to pause and when a next sentence is starting.
I look forward to reading your new pieces!
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