Saturday, 10 June 2017
The Bathroom
A frightful evening, after watching a really bad but spooky horror movie, I decided it was time for the daily cleansing of filth on my body. I go through the regular routine of stripping off the clothes... we don't need to talk about this part. After that is all done I take the step into the chamber of water. I suddenly noticed a leak in the tap so I decided to look at it then it suddenly jetted out and flooded the shower. The water just kept gushing out and it was getting worse then the shower suddenly just exploded.
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A really nice piece of descriptive writing! I particularly like the horror description, giving the piece an ominous feel. The part about the filth is really vivid, and the chamber for a shower emanates coldness. Good use of grammar and punctuation, especially the ellipsis. If anything you could perhaps extend the ending and add more to the story, and also experiment with some different types of punctuation. Keep up the good work!
Nice piece of writing, I liked the part where the shower exploded.
I really liked the use of vocabulary
Thank you anonymous for the very insightful comment. I will be sure to take all of the tips into mind. Next time use a very nice username, but not too revealing.
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