Saturday, 17 June 2017
To Mr.Andrew
How must it feel to know that you are so essential to the birth of babies and the well being of several patients a day? I must admit that you are a talented and helpful person having to individually help people by travelling to them and not have the essential tools but still managing to keep them healthy. How must it feel knowing that people in poverty depend you to save them from their impending doom? The fact that you are there everyday to come and support them must make you an idol to people in Sierra Leone dosen't it?
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4 comments:
I really enjoyed reading your post, it was full of adjectives and descriptive writing. XD
And what else could I improve on, Lieve?
This is really interesting, Greg. It's full of descriptive writing and it has adjectives in the sentences.=
Thank you for this great piece Greg. A very good use of vocabulary, grammar and spelling! I love the use of rhetorical questions to make the writing more emotive.
To improve, I would suggest to split your work in paragraphs so it is easier for the reader to follow your work and also to sign it off so the recipient knows who is writing to him. Also, you could read it out loud to see where you need commas (when you pause is when you should put one in).
Great work, I really enjoyed reading this.
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